Rifle Vintage
Rifle Vintage
Would any English native speakers help me with this (part5)? Are there correct in English?
"The Fist Army led by Yang Jingyu operated in an arduous struggle guerrilla warfare by using of encircling and outflanking tactics, and they were crushed our enemies one by one and by a clean sweep, therefore , they captured a lots of small arms and heavy arms weapons, and the troops extended a times. They thoroughly accomplished weaponry and equipment transform from common rifle to 1938 vintage. Just like the local guerrillas sung “ we have no guns, no cannons, but enemies are making for us” 1936 April, general Yang Jingyu led his army succeeded in ambushing at Erdaowaizi of Ji’an county, three companies of the indoctrination cavalry troops have been completely wiped out. And they became famous. "
The Fist Army, led by Yang Jingyu, (you need parentheses here) operated in an arduous struggle of guerrilla warfare. (Full stop. New sentence). By the use of encircling and outflanking tactics, (delete and) they crushed our enemies one by one. They captured a lots of small and heavy arms weaponry (delete comma. A comma is wrong before and) and the troops extended at times. They thoroughly accomplished a progression in their weaponry and the equipment transformed from the common rifle to 1938 vintage. Just like the local guerrillas sang “ We (even though this is within a sentence, it is the start of a quote from a song so should start with a capital letter) have no guns, no cannons, but enemies are making for us” In April 1936 (this is the correct way to express a date in English), general Yang Jingyu led his army and succeeded in an ambush at Erdaowaizi of Ji’an county. Three companies of the indoctrination cavalry troops were (you used the wrong tense) completely wiped out. (expressing it like this is not correct. Sentences should not start with conjunctions e.g. and, but, so, then but writing this way has the stylistic effect of emphasising that they became famous) And they became famous.
I hope this helps
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